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Can you help me with writing two more body paragraphs and a conclusion to my essay on michelle obama’s final adress. While also color coding  the TRANSITION/ INTRO TO NEW CLAIM, EVIDENCE, COMMENTARY, CONNECTS TO CLAIM, and CONNECTS TO THESIS in each one. The conclusion doesn’t have to be color coded. Here is the speech below; 

Michelle Obama was the First Lady of the United States during the presidential administration of her husband,
Barack Obama (2009-2017). During that administration, she led programs including the Reach Higher
Initiative, which encourages students to continue their education after high school. One way it does so is by
supporting high school counselors’ efforts to get students into college. On January 6, 2017, Obama gave her
final speech as First Lady at an event honoring outstanding school counselors. The following passage is an
excerpt from that speech. 
makes to convey her message about her expectations and hope for young people in the United States.
[A]s I end my time in the White House, I can think
of no better message to send our young people in my
last official remarks as First Lady. So, for all the
Line young people in this room and those who are
5 watching, know that this country belongs to you—to
all of you, from every background and walk of life. If
you or your parents are immigrants, know that you are
part of a proud American tradition—the infusion of
new cultures, talents and ideas, generation after
10 generation, that has made us the greatest country on
earth.
If your family doesn’t have much money, I want
you to remember that in this country, plenty of folks,
including me and my husband—we started out with
15 very little. But with a lot of hard work and a good
education, anything is possible—even becoming
President. That’s what the American Dream is all
about.
If you are a person of faith, know that religious
20 diversity is a great American tradition, too. In fact,
that’s why people first came to this country—to
worship freely. And whether you are Muslim,
Christian, Jewish, Hindu, Sikh—these religions are
teaching our young people about justice, and
25 compassion, and honesty. So I want our young people
to continue to learn and practice those values with
pride. You see, our glorious diversity—our diversities

of faiths and colors and creeds—that is not a threat to
who we are, it makes us who we are. So the young
30 people here and the young people out there: Do not
ever let anyone make you feel like you don’t matter,
or like you don’t have a place in our American
story—because you do. And you have a right to be
exactly who you are.
35 But I also want to be very clear: This right isn’t just
handed to you. No, this right has to be earned every
single day. You cannot take your freedoms for
granted. Just like generations who have come before
you, you have to do your part to preserve and protect
40 those freedoms. And that starts right now, when
you’re young.
Right now, you need to be preparing yourself to
add your voice to our national conversation. You need
to prepare yourself to be informed and engaged as a
45 citizen, to serve and to lead, to stand up for our proud
American values and to honor them in your daily
lives. And that means getting the best education
possible so you can think critically, so you can
express yourself clearly, so you can get a good job
50 and support yourself and your family, so you can be a
positive force in your communities.
And when you encounter obstacles—because I
guarantee you, you will, and many of you already
have—when you are struggling and you start thinking

about giving up, I want you to remember something

that my husband and I have talked about since we first

started this journey nearly a decade ago, something
that has carried us through every moment in this
White House and every moment of our lives, and that
60 is the power of hope—the belief that something better
is always possible if you’re willing to work for it and
fight for it.
It is our fundamental belief in the power of hope
that has allowed us to rise above the voices of doubt
65 and division, of anger and fear that we have faced in
our own lives and in the life of this country. Our hope
that if we work hard enough and believe in ourselves,
then we can be whatever we dream, regardless of the
limitations that others may place on us. The hope that
70 when people see us for who we truly are, maybe, just
maybe they, too, will be inspired to rise to their best
possible selves.
That is the hope of students like Kyra 1 who fight to

discover their gifts and share them with the world. It’s
75 the hope of school counselors like Terri and all these
folks up here who guide those students every step of
the way, refusing to give up on even a single young
person. Shoot, it’s the hope of my—folks like my dad
who got up every day to do his job at the city water
80 plant; the hope that one day, his kids would go to
college and have opportunities he never dreamed of.
That’s the kind of hope that every single one of
us—politicians, parents, preachers—all of us need to
be providing for our young people. Because that is
85 what moves this country forward every single
day—our hope for the future and the hard work that
hope inspires.

 

INTRODUCTION:

HOOK

CONTEXT

THESIS

 

Education is the beacon of hope, the bridge to progress, and holds the key to a brighter future. It has the power to transform lives, to defy the odds, and to reshape one’s future. Michelle Obama is the gleaming example of the American Dream personified, rising from her humble beginnings and a troubled past to become not only America’s first lady but also a shining testament to the boundless possibilities that education can offer. “Michelle Obama’s final address speech on education serves as a powerful testament to the profound impact of education on individual lives and the broader society, highlighting its potential to break down barriers, inspire hope, and create a more inclusive, equitable, and promising future. Through her personal journey and impassioned call to action, she exemplifies the transformative potential of education and urges us to recognize it as a catalyst for positive change in our communities and nation.” Michelle Obama’s speech serves as a call for others to follow the path of education and to pursue the American Dream. 

 

BODY PARAGRAPHS

TRANSITION/ INTRO TO NEW CLAIM

EVIDENCE

COMMENTARY

CONNECTS TO CLAIM

CONNECTS TO THESIS

 

In addition to serving as a beacon of hope and an advocate for education, Michelle Obama’s address goes beyond the rhetoric of inspiration. In her introduction, Michelle Obama immediately grabs the audience’s attention with an emotional and heartfelt tone. She begins by stating, “As I end my time in the White House, I can think of no better message to send our young people in my last official remarks as First Lady.” The use of the first person and the term “my last official remarks” establishes a personal connection with the audience. By framing her speech as a message to the youth, she conveys her sense of responsibility and commitment to their future. The central theme of Michelle Obama’s speech is the inclusive and diverse nature of the United States. She emphasizes that the country belongs to everyone, regardless of their background or walk of life. Through the phrases “this country belongs to you” and “from every background and walk of life,” she highlights the idea that America is a land of opportunity and acceptance. Furthermore, Michelle Obama highlights the importance of education and hard work in achieving success in the United States. She shares her own experiences, mentioning that both she and her husband started with very little but achieved success through hard work and a good education.