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Please Do A peer review of The Wal-Mart Complications: Scouring the…
Please Do A peer review of The Wal-Mart Complications: Scouring the Globe to Give Shoppers an $8.63 Polo Shirt using the format below
English 103–Essay #3: Peer Review Worksheet
Reviewer’s Name:
Essay Writer’s Name:
Put your answers below (or on a separate sheet of paper) to each of the questions.
1. First, begin by reading the essay through non-stop. What is the purpose of the essay? Write a few
sentences about your overall impression. Summarize the main idea of the essay as you understand it.
Who do you think is the audience for this paper?
Next read the essay to yourself slowly and the responses to the following questions, or make
notes and marks on the essay as necessary. Avoid useless Yes or No answers; offer complete
responses and suggestions you feel would help to improve your peer’s draft.
2. Find the thesis sentence in the paper and underline it. What insight about the corporation does the
thesis make? What do you enjoy most about the writer’s approach to the subject?
Introduction and background information:
3. Does the author mention the corporation and provide adequate background information in the
introduction? Is there a creative “hook” that grabs the reader’s attention?
4. Is there a brief overview of the essay in the introductionsome indication as to how the author will
develop his or her ideas? What needs to be added, if anything?
5. Are there any terms used in the essay that require explanation or special definition? List them.
Important terms should be defined in the introduction or early in the essay.
Body Paragraphs:
6. Examine one paragraph. Choose one body paragraph to examine in detail. The purpose of the body
paragraphs is to take one aspect of the thesis statement, explain it in detail, and support it with researched
quotes, explaining how the quote proves the author’s point. The goal of this essay is to convince readers
whether or not to support a corporation based on its business practices.
A. Topic Sentence: Find the topic sentence of the paragraph, and underline it. The topic
sentence in the paragraph should express the paragraph’s main point, which supports the paper’s
thesis. Is the point of that sentence sufficiently clear? If not, how could it be improved?
B. Transitions: Identify words or phrases at the beginning and / or end of the paragraph that serve
to make a logical transition both to that paragraph and to the next paragraph. Do those transitions
work for you? Could they be improved? How?
C. Quotes: Look at the evidence provided in the paragraph (usually a quote or two, but at least a
specific reference to the source). Does it clearly support the conclusion(s) drawn from it? Is more
evidence needed?
7. Look briefly at the paragraphs or sections on (1) the consumer’s perception of the corporation; (2) the
corporation’s website / self-representation and/or advertising; and (3) the sections where the corporation’s
business practices are discussed. Note any places where more detail, clarity, support, or development is
needed.
Suggestions for Reorganization or Development:
8. Focus now on the entire essay. What still needs to be discussed by the writer? Discuss any ideas you
might have to help the writer complete effective argument about whether or not we should continue to
support the corporation.
9. Underline and / or make margin notes to address each of the following questions.
· Point out passages that provide a clear, easy-to-follow analysis.
· Point out places where the writer showed some enlightening insight into the subject
· Point out places where you would like greater specificity or more detail.
· Point out general or flat statements. Indicate places where the writer might be more successful in
illustrating the thesis through use of summary, paraphrase, or quotation.
10. Look at the ending. Is it satisfying? Does it repeat what you already know? Does it oversimplify or
reduce the author’s thesis to something less important than you expected? Does the ending frame the
essay by referring back to the beginning or explain the overall significance or importance of the subject?
Were you convinced by the author’s argument? Was it insightful?
11. Documentation & Quoting: Is the documentation, as far as it is used in the draft, correct? Does the
author use quotes effectively? Does s/he integrate them well, or are they simply inserted? Does the author
use too many quotes? Too few? Are there appropriate uses of paraphrase and summary as well?
